Essay Review

1-I believe paragraph 1 has too much information, and does not states what is going to be discussed in the body paragraphs.

2-“Students who are intrinsically motivated tend to have better academic performances.”(Paragraph 2)
-Somehow it is true, when I see other students are doing better than me, I try to do a better job and do what it takes to improve.

3-What is better, Intrinsic or Extrinsic motivation?
-It all depends on what fits you better, but like the essay says “It is believed that intrinsic motivation is more effective than extrinsic motivation.”(paragraph 1)

Summary

“It is believed that intrinsic motivation is more effective than extrinsic motivation.” Intrinsic motivation is on us, and goes with us anywhere we go. Extrinsic motivation can vanish anytime. We may have something material, or a person that brings us extrinsic motivation, but it can be gone the next day as well as the motivation and all we will have left is the motivation on us “ intrinsic motivation”.